Our place
I remember the first time we met.
You were jogging down the beach and tripped over a sandcastle
the moment you saw me.
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I remember the first time I kissed you.
You threw me into the waves and pulled me quickly back into your arms
as your lips devoured mine.
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I remember the first time we made love.
You planned a delectable dinner with wine and dessert
then you entangled your body in mine as we became one.
***
I remember the night you left me.
I returned to our beach and talked to you in the stars.
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This was done for Friday Fictioneers:
MY THOUGHTS ON THE SUBJECT ARE AS FOLLOWS 
a sensual story with a lot of heart…I loved it
Thanks babe
Oh wow, that ending is incredible!
Thank you!
A lot said in a few words. Very well written
Thank you so much for reading and commenting.
my apologies to whoever i said was my favorite this week. this one is now my favorite. well done.
Rich! That is kind of you. I am so thankful that you liked it!
we’re thankful you wrote it.
ouch…hate when that happens… 😦
i felt the pain.
Thank you for stopping by and taking time to read my work!
This is so full of love and then love lost.. Loved the way it was going until I read the last stanza.. Sad turn to such a beautiful love story!
Thank you for reading and leaving me such kind words!
Very nicely done!
Thank you my writing friend!
Beautifully done.
Thank you Sandra!
Lovely. Would I be correct in assuming that he left by way of death and that’s why she’s talking to him in the stars?
yes ma’am. Thank you for reading!
Just perfect.
Thank you so very much!
You’re welcome and thank you for reading and commenting on my story 🙂
my pleasure!
lovely and passionate, sometimes I read one and think I wish I could have written it. This is one of those times.
What a wonderful compliment! Thank you so much. You made my day.
🙂
This is beautifully written. Thank you for sharing
Thank you so much!
Hi Deana,
An arc of love story, like a cupid’s arrow in flight. Great imagery. Ron
Thank you so very much!!!
this was such a lovely love story from start to finish.
Thank you so much for your kind words!
Beautiful story, beautifully written.
Thank you Jan! Your kind words mean alot!
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Awesome writing. Loved the flow.
Thank you Shirley!
Wonderful poetry, and a lovely melancholic end. Sounds like he left by dying. And the repetition of “I remember ” is so strong.
Thank you for the comment. It really means so much to me.
Really touching and very beautiful piece. So good it defies writing a joke about it …
Thanks Perry! Stop by anytime.
You’ve told this story in such a lovely, understated yet powerful way. Very moving.
Thank you so much Joanna! It’s so nice to wake up to your kind words.
met/kissed/love/left. The words that prove you’ve retold the quintessential love story using this setting. (Applause).
This comment is going to have me smiling all day! Thank you so much for your very kind words.
I’m glad to know I made somebody smile. Oh, the intoxicating power of the written word.
This is so sweet, even in its sadness. She was lucky to have her one true love in her life. Not many people have that…
That is so very true. Thank you so much for commenting.
Beautifully poignant with wonderful romance to boost. 🙂
Thank you so much!
A very nice story ranks up there with one of the best this week. Well done.
Tom
Wow Tom! That is so nice to hear! Thank you!
Lovely story of true romance–unfortunately, a sad, but sensitively portrayed, ending.
Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate them.
Powerful piece of writing, Deana. I am glad for the last line, I thought it would be something else.
Thank you so much!
That’s amazing that you were able to fit an entire relationship into 100 words! I especially loved the last line.
Thank you Sheila! I am so glad you took the time to read.
Powerful emotions here. Boy meets girl, loves her and leaves her.
Thank you. It is an unfortunate story~
I like this vignette – something approaching a poem, perhaps, and full of love and imagery. I particularly like how specific you are about the events – the throwing into the waves in particular, is a novel image and really allows us to feel the passion and love.
What a nice comment! Thank you so very much. Your words are encouraging.
Deana,
I loved this! Except for the sad ending, of course. Memories around the ocean and wave. What a wonderful story it made here. I liked the kissing one the best!
Thank you for your really nice words! This made me smile.