Your walls will crumble

08 Mar 2013

72 Comments

Your walls will crumble

It is time for you to take responsibility for your iniquities.

I will no longer be the victim of your actions.

You will answer for your foolish choices.

Your stone-built fortress must fall.

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72 thoughts on “Your walls will crumble”

Mel on March 8, 2013 at 1:22 pm said:

Holy cow, this is AMAZING! So well done. Forceful. Yet eloquent. Perfect combination.

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 1:34 pm said:
  
  Thank you Mel! Your compliment made my day.
  
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Lance on March 8, 2013 at 1:26 pm said:

eloquent is perfect word for this. You also used your frustration release to show how strong you are.

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 1:37 pm said:
  
  Thanks my love. Your support means everything to me.
  
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Jennifer Dillon on March 8, 2013 at 1:42 pm said:

Love the word ‘iniquities’ in this!

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 2:17 pm said:
  
  Thanks!
  
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ladywhispers on March 8, 2013 at 1:52 pm said:

Wow this is truly amazing

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 2:17 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much!
  
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Tara R. on March 8, 2013 at 2:16 pm said:

At some point we can’t keep suffering over someone else’s decisions. This was full of truth.

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 2:18 pm said:
  
  Very true. There comes a time when you have to focus on your own decisions.
  
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Christine on March 8, 2013 at 3:02 pm said:

I think that *you* are the rock, here. There’s a lot of strength in your words.

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 3:12 pm said:
  
  Thank you Christine. Your kind words mean so much to me.
  
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Gina on March 8, 2013 at 3:32 pm said:

Love the strength portrayed here and the word iniquities. Like the tension surrounding choices too.

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 4:11 pm said:
  
  Thank you Gina! You are too kind.
  
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Ruby on March 8, 2013 at 3:35 pm said:

This is so amazing and powerful!

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 4:12 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much Ruby!
  
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Spencer Throssell (@Spencaurus) on March 8, 2013 at 3:38 pm said:

I would hate to be on the receiving end of this one. So passionate. Beautifully done!

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 4:12 pm said:
  
  Thanks Spencer. I am so glad you stopped by.
  
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Valerie on March 8, 2013 at 5:28 pm said:

“I will no longer be the victim of your actions.”

I love the strong voice of this piece! Really well done!!

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 5:50 pm said:
  
  Thank you Valerie. I am so glad that you liked it.
  
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steph on March 8, 2013 at 7:01 pm said:

I agree – iniquities is a great word – tells the story well. A tale of empowerment – I like it!

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 7:54 pm said:
  
  Thank you Steph!
  
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Suzanne on March 8, 2013 at 7:26 pm said:

This is so strong and passionate. Lovely writing! Great use of the prompt!

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 7:57 pm said:
  
  Thank you Suzann. I love it when you read my work
  
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jannatwrites on March 8, 2013 at 7:58 pm said:

Hmm…not much I can say that hasn’t already been said! I also like iniquities and the tone of this. What a nice way to put your foot down and insist on change.

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 8:00 pm said:
  
  Thanks Janna. I am glad you stopped by!
  
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welcometograndcentral on March 8, 2013 at 8:04 pm said:

You totally nailed answering the prompt. I admire your writing talent.

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 8:09 pm said:
  
  You are too kind! Your comment leaves me with so much encouragement.
  
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t on March 8, 2013 at 8:38 pm said:

Damn, that could have been written by Paul Weller! Great job!

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- deanabo on March 8, 2013 at 9:44 pm said:
  
  What an amazing compliment! Thank you so much. You have brightened my weekend.
  
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joetwo on March 8, 2013 at 9:52 pm said:

Nicely done! Who said it is not as good as mine?!!!!

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- deanabo on March 9, 2013 at 7:01 am said:
  
  I do! Thanks
  
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chamblee54 on March 8, 2013 at 11:57 pm said:

In the bible it was a trumpet that brought the stone walls tumbling down. In modern times it is the strumpet. The effects are the same. The music was probably better back then… it has a good dance, and you can beat people to it. The visuals are better in modern times, and we have a record of the festivities that you can upload. What do you do with the old mortar?

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Mike on March 9, 2013 at 5:40 am said:

A great take on the prompt.
Comes across as a voice that has suddenly found the strength to fight back.

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- deanabo on March 9, 2013 at 7:04 am said:
  
  Yes! I believe it has. Thank you so much
  
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Mirabai on March 9, 2013 at 6:48 am said:

Beautiful! I really love the way you write! It’s very good and touches the heart…. and it is “kicking” yourself to think about certain things/patterns in life.

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- deanabo on March 9, 2013 at 7:04 am said:
  
  Thank you. Your kind words of encouragment mean so much!
  
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trifectawriting on March 9, 2013 at 7:03 am said:

Great job. I like the tone of your pieces. Angry but strong.

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- deanabo on March 9, 2013 at 7:05 am said:
  
  Thank you! I am glad you like it!
  
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Renee TennisMcKinley (@2old2tap) on March 9, 2013 at 7:13 am said:

I love the stance here. No longer sitting back and accepting. But, now taking it to the fortress.

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- deanabo on March 9, 2013 at 4:30 pm said:
  
  Thanks Renee. I felt strong emotionally just writing it.
  
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atrm61 on March 9, 2013 at 9:32 am said:

Forceful & dynamic!Love this Deana:-)I think you should take up writing poetry & get yourself published-seriously,you write potent stuff!

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- deanabo on March 9, 2013 at 4:38 pm said:
  
  I was thinking about releasing my poetry in a few months. Thank you so much.
  
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  - atrm61 on March 9, 2013 at 4:39 pm said:
    
    Wonderful to hear this Deana-wish you all the best:-)
Linda on March 9, 2013 at 2:37 pm said:

Oh wow! I love the message! And the picture! And how cool is that about the literal shape of the poem! and in 33 words. So cool!!

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- deanabo on March 9, 2013 at 6:13 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much Linda. My daughters boyfriend actually took that picture.
  
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Misky on March 9, 2013 at 3:20 pm said:

Puttin’ your foot down! Well done on this write, Deana.

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- deanabo on March 9, 2013 at 4:39 pm said:
  
  Thank you so very much!
  
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ramblingsfromamum on March 9, 2013 at 7:33 pm said:

Never underestimate the strength of the female mind…. the pic at the precipice of the waterfall – well chosen for the words Bo.

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- deanabo on March 9, 2013 at 7:35 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much. It’s one of my favorite pictures!
  
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Eric Misener on March 10, 2013 at 12:21 am said:

I don’t want to read too much into this, but as one who has worked with domestic violence victims, I wish more of them came to this conclusion. Well done.

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- deanabo on March 10, 2013 at 8:42 am said:
  
  Thank you Eric. Sometimes its nice to be able to stand up for yourself.
  
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Ruby Manchanda on March 10, 2013 at 7:45 am said:

Powerful

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- deanabo on March 10, 2013 at 8:43 am said:
  
  Thank you Ruby
  
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kz on March 10, 2013 at 9:28 am said:

very powerful 33 words

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- deanabo on March 10, 2013 at 9:57 am said:
  
  Thank you so much
  
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Draug419 on March 10, 2013 at 10:36 am said:

There’s a lot of firepower behind this piece. Those stone walls will fall!

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- deanabo on March 10, 2013 at 10:41 am said:
  
  Thank you so much.
  
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Björn Rudberg (brudberg) on March 10, 2013 at 12:47 pm said:

very good, true strength

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- deanabo on March 10, 2013 at 1:05 pm said:
  
  thanks so much!
  
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kymminbarcelona on March 10, 2013 at 4:28 pm said:

Love the take-no-prisoners attitude! Powerful poem (and reflection of photo is gorgeous).

Bit of crit: Its should be it’s; and stone built needs a hyphen (stone-built fortress). [If you make the beginning "It is" rather than "it's", that will save your word count, too.]

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- deanabo on March 10, 2013 at 4:36 pm said:
  
  Thanks! I fixed it.
  
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Teala on March 10, 2013 at 7:32 pm said:

I love the imagery here. Great job!

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- deanabo on March 10, 2013 at 8:33 pm said:
  
  Thank you so much.
  
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Esther on March 10, 2013 at 9:44 pm said:

Oooh, drama!! A very strong voice in so few words. Good job.

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- deanabo on March 11, 2013 at 5:28 am said:
  
  Thank you so very much
  
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Stacey (@Staceysmoments) on March 10, 2013 at 10:10 pm said:

Such strong words. I love the image of a stone fortress.

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- deanabo on March 11, 2013 at 5:29 am said:
  
  Thanks Stacey!
  
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Dayle Lynne on March 11, 2013 at 12:07 am said:

Love the strength here!

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- deanabo on March 11, 2013 at 5:30 am said:
  
  Thank you Dayle
  
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beebeesworld on March 17, 2013 at 7:28 pm said:

Thanks for reading my St Patricks Day Stuff-beebee

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- deanabo on March 17, 2013 at 7:42 pm said:
  
  Of course! I enjoy your blog.
  
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